Adding Detail To Sentences

Adding Detail To Sentences

A complex sentence has more than one clause. It has added detail giving the reader more information. It adds interest and makes writing JUICY.

You can add to the

beginning

middle

end

of simple sentences.

 

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

When we went to camp Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course.

Mr Jacobsen who helps us is our  coach on the confidence course.

                                             

                               

Mr Jacobsen was our coach on the confidence course When we went to camp .

When we heard that we we're doing sailing  I was nervous about sailing on camp.

I was  nervous as we went by the sailing boats for sailing on camp.

           

I was nervous about sailing on camp because it was my first time .

When we finished sailing  we went abseiling.

we went on this challenging obstacle which was called abseiling.

we went abseiling When it was nice and sunny .

Our Year 6 Camp.

I like camp because you go to great places and next week were going camp at Kawau island .The activities that we a going to do is sailing,rock climbing ,swimming , Burma trailing , volleyball , and kayak .


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I Herd a Whisper.

Once upon a time there was a little girl named Taylar and she was walking through this dark forest. Then she heard a whisper saying “ Turn Around “ and Taylar was frightened by this horrifying sound.

Then suddenly she had reached her destination. Then the whispering sound was still going on and on. Taylar ran up to her tree house and didn't come down. As Taylar heard that someone was knocking on the door.

Taylar Had still didn't go to the door because she had thought that it wouldn't have been that strange sound again. She had looked outside the window and it was that sound she had tried to look and see who it was.

She had went down to see who it was and she had sawn the face and it was her big brother tom trying to scare her. She was very angry because she had thought that the sound that was talking was someone that wants to kill her.

To Be Continued .

Kiwis vs Cook Island.

On the kiwis first practise game. They versed the cook island at London , When kick off started they nearly got a 100 meter try but the cook island team had held them back but after half time the score was 38 - 0 to the kiwis and then on second half the kiwis just thrashed them by miles and at the end of the game the final score was 52 - 4 .

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The strange Whisper

On a rainy afternoon Jack and his dad went outside to check if any animals had been wet. The rain was so hard they couldn't get the sheep into the farm shed. As Jack we're taking the cows and the calves into shelter he heard a whisper saying ‘ DO NOT COME OVER HEAR ALL ELSE SOMETHING BAD IS GOING TO HAPPEN TO YOU ‘ .

Then Dad looked at jack ,  jack was frightened by this whisper sound he began to go closer and closer as the whisper sound kept on warning him not to go closer.Jack had recognized that whispering sound .

Jack ran to where the whisper sound was.When Jack was identifying the voice Dad was loading the sheep into the stock truck to turn into meat. Jack had call out to Dad to go with him to look for this familiar voice which was coming from  the farm shed .

Jack and Dad Ran to look who it was but the voice just disappeared But the person was still there. It was hiding behind the hay. As Dad looked over to see who it was.’ Its Uncle Benny ‘

Jack said he was surprised because Jack and his dad we're going to pick him up from the airport.‘ SURPRISE ‘ said Uncle Benny.Then Uncle Benny and jack and his Dad went home .

The Accident

The Accident

One day their was this boy who was called sam the had one brother and one sister their names we're tom and sally they had a farm but not close to their house . But they'd always go there to check on their animals. Tom and sam always go there on there four wheelers they had a good time because tom takes care of the cows and sam takes care of the calfs.

Then suddenly as sam got off his four wheeler this tough horrifying bull was at the back of him. As sam was checking the calf’s the bull was getting furious at sam. Tom couldn't see because the was on the other side . Sam was afraid and horrified that the bull might do something aggressive to sam .

Then the bull  came crashing over the fence as tom saw the bull out of his paddock tom came racing back to the house so he could tell their dad to ring the police.As Tom weretrying too ring some people to come sam jumped on his fourwheeler but he forgot to close the calfs gate as one by one calfs we're going out .

Then Tom went back to check on Sam. Tom  he had seen the sam has been crushed by the four wheeler because the bull had runned over Sam.Tom went back to call the ambulance and told dad that the had crashed.Tom and dad went back to check if Sam had broken any bones but as the ambulance arrived they said that he has broken his leg and his ribs but that's all they said the has to stay in the hospital for at least a few years .

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